Schmaltzy, Saccharine Sweet...Dreams
Your gorgeous features within my dreams are cast,
as the winds of love climb like a sail upon my mast.
Two frustrated lovers floating both within a dream,
wishing to bring to life, dreamt moments so serene.
You, there in a very distant Country so very far away,
whilst I claim my home here in the West of the USA.
Chances are, we'll never have the privilege to actually meet,
so let's agree to dream of passion and love so very sweet.
When I awake, I slowly turn to face where you once were,
refusing to open wide my eyes, preferring that sleepy blur.
That blurry place between imagination and stark reality,
where still I feel and smell your body lying close to me.
When finally from that cozy blur, mind and heart detached,
I'm left a victim of robbery, my love from me was snatched.
Then it hits me like a ton of bricks and I only want to scream,
an overdose of Saccharine caused this sweet Schmaltzy dream!
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Posted: Apr 2012
About this poem:
Well, MacDuff suggested a Schmaltzy, Saccharine Sweet poem, and this is the best I could come up with! Sorry ladies.... maybe I need some lessons in romance! I'm available for tutoring! ;-)
Comments (23)
a gentleman for sure you set the bar high oh do we gents got our work cut out for this. and oh yes do I know who this saccharine sweet schmaltzy dream is for, yes I do!
kickit
I don't know how any women could resist such a sweet lament. Beautiful and lyrical. Have they started knocking at your door yet? Cheers mate.
I enjoy the opportunity to actually 'participate' in a challenge - Thanks Rob for suggesting it! As to the door being knocked upon.... unfortunately, still very silent! Thanks again to all of you for your kindnesses!!
Wonderful write, fellow American Poet!!
What a contender - Saccharin oozing out of every syllable in the very highest traditions of Don Juan... BRAVO
Bill
.. sweet charmer hahah
When I awake, I slowly turn to face where you once were,
refusing to open wide my eyes, preferring that sleepy blur.
That blurry place between imagination and stark reality,
where still I feel and smell your body lying close to me:
whilst I claim my home here in the West of the USA.
Chances are, we'll never have the privilege to actually meet,
so let's agree to dream of passion and love so very sweet
John I don't know about you but distance shouldn't matter to consummate the sweet nectar of love...I would go millions of miles to meet John but then this is me...
I love it so much, even I am putting my bet to the max on this...
Love it so much John and thanks for your prayers.
Phyllis
as the winds of love climb like a sail upon my mast.
Two frustrated lovers floating both within a dream,
wishing to bring to life, dreamt moments so serene.
Sir Swade,
I think this kind of poetry is what brought us to poetry in the first place... We all of us men and woman like the Schmaltzy now and again... Lets face it without all the sweet Saccharine the human race would not exist... It is love that makes the world a great place to be... We need more of this kind of poetry... It is macho to show ones feelings...It shows a woman a REAL man Geeeez! what woman doesn't lurve a Schmaltzy man.
This is one of those weak at the knees poems... Just beautiful
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Cheers.
Sometimes dreams may come true!!! ^_^
Thank you for sharing!!!
You're BOTH the icing on the cake to show up on my poem and sweet comments make!!