Metapora

by fjamesj9701DunkinDonuts, Florida, USA

Sep 2013 1,132 Views 23 comments

Metapora

Author: Charlie Brown

What lies beneath
The flooding drains
A spiders web
Spawned of rustic chains
If you ask me how I am
I'll reply that I'm ok
Hiding behind this mask
As I resume to face this day
Then theres the sights
A synonym of what I cannot find in you
But I have found
Sometimes hunger is the only kind of food
Have I lost my Faith?
Its something that I could never see
Then theres your eyes
Still falling away from me
But if I was a better man
Would your rivers run deep into outer space
While all along your insisting
That we are both two worlds away
Behold this longer list of denials
And uncertain hope
Reflecting fears of affection
And you still keep your eyes closed
Then by my own admissions
My heart has grown from cold to colder
And by my own submissions
Losing your love has bled me sober

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Posted: Sep 2013

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niah9Auckland, New ZealandSep 15, 2013

We as poets Jesse....read many more things than meant...but sometimes, it's because the words might be scary, and I see that in the lines ...list of denial...and uncertain hope....
I was told recently, as a poet I hide behind my
poetry.....reading this....I have more questions that answers....
Kathy

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandSep 15, 2013

YOU NEED A HOT WATER BOTTLE JESSE HA HA WONDERFUL PIECE OF WRITTING I CAN RELATED MY FRIEND GOD BLESS

jonE2toneOrlando, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Certainly an honest write and I can relate. Regards

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Thank you Kathy for your time and thoughts. I appreciate that you lay down your thoughts that show you pay attention. Thank you again...Jesse

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandSep 15, 2013

I HAVE A BIG SHELL ON MY BACK BULLET PROOF FIRST LINE OF DEFENCE YOU GET MY DRIFT TOP OF THE WORLD MY FRIEND ALWAYS A GREAT PLEASURE TALKING TO YOU HOPE ALL IS WELL DISAPPEARED FOR A WHILE SOME WOMAN KIDNAP YOU HA HA GOD BLESS YOU I PASS YOU A SMILE

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

LOL No LDH , no kidnapping here yet. Maybe eventually but until then Im still here. Thank you for your time and laughter my friend. I appreciate your time...Jesse

weemick1960Fife, Scotland UKSep 15, 2013

Hi Jesse, this is a right where a man bares his inner self. I see darkness, I see pain. I can understand the fact that when people ask you how you are you say ok. You don't want to burden anyone with your problems. The healing starts from within Jesse. We can write our words of friendship , hope and Love, and they may help you a little, but in the end you are the only one who can truly lift yourself up to be the man you should be. You know there are people here who care about you and they're always read to listen. We all hope that one day you will come through this tunnel and emerge into the light, the man you always were meant to be. You take care now, your friend...MIKE.

madtat29Farmington, New Mexico USASep 15, 2013

Wow dude...give me a hug you gifted bastaed

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Thank you 2Tones, much appreciated...Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Hey Mike , I appreciate that. Your time and thoughts are held in high regards as well with your concern. I know there are many who care and its encouraging to know. Thank you my friend...Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Mr Tat, thank you much. A post is incomplete until my Bro responds. Thank you much again. Now where is that hug

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandSep 15, 2013

tell the truth jesse were you kidnapped by aliens it mentioned outer space ha ha friend just having a laugh take care dude

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 15, 2013

Perhaps because honestly there are about two days I lost. I just woke up in a whole different time and day LoL. So Perhaps BatMan

Spartacus2012Biloxi, Mississippi USASep 15, 2013

Hey Jesse,
Deep emotional write from the soul...I liked this one.

Regards,

Ken

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 16, 2013

Hey Ken , Thank you very much. Its always a pleasant visit when you stop by my friend...Jesse

Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoSep 18, 2013

This is just fantastic Jesse. Your poetry just keeps growing to higher heights my friend. Exceptionally done!

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 19, 2013

Thank you Mr MMPNUnoB1, good to see you here my friend. Am I still awaiting a new post? Must go look...Jesse

ladyjewelDurban, KwaZulu-Natal South AfricaSep 19, 2013

And by my own submissions
Losing your love has bled me sober

I think most of us have been here, I remember feeling like my soul had been ripped out of my chest and my heart had turned to stone, this brought back those feelings, but look at me now

you are loved very much my friend never forget that, and your words always reach inside my soul and touch my heart

Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoSep 20, 2013

I think you read this one at Poetry Soup my friend. But you said a new post so here it is on the board. We will catch up a little later young Jedi. May the force be with you.

diana_1San fernando, San Fernando Trinidad and TobagoSep 20, 2013

If you ask me how I am I'm ok.... Have I lost my faith.... My heart has grown from cold to colder.... you have brought a hidden reality to the surface.... beautiful stirringly.... an echo that I stifled within me... well done.

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 21, 2013

Thank you much LJ, your words are pleasant to read and I appreciate them with high regards. Thank you so much for your always kind heart...Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 21, 2013

Yes you did read it at the soup and thank you for your time again Mr Master Kung Fu Poet MMPNUnoB1. Man your name gets longer and longer every time I type it.

Always my pleasure my friend thank you is nothing in equal comparison to the encouragement you give, but thank you anyways my friend...Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USASep 21, 2013

Thank you Diana very much for your time and understanding thoughts. Its always a pleasure...Jesse

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