I am here Standing amongst the sand Enjoying the inanimate touch My mind on everything and nothing Seashells glisten temptingly to be plucked All other bodies are surreal Like figurines Strategically placed They have no purpose Other than to take up space A soft breeze flows along my thoughts My senses keen To the air wiping them clean Serene as this may seem I feel a threatening onslaught My eyes become frantic Finding that which has become ominous I do a scan of the sand The seashells look bland Bodies disappear in a blink My mind can no longer think Fear rips through my insides As I realize something is keeping me in Walls of glass precariously glaring Acquainting me With my lack of escape Reluctantly my gaze wanders To the salty behemoth That has begun a beastly chase My eyes watch in horror At his astronomic rise I know he shall be my demise I run The sand an endless dessert The glass shimmering its evil smile. Behind me I feel the beast growing Sucking in all that is alive No matter how fast I run I cannot seem to gain a mile It grows in power and strength Building higher and higher Breaking records with his substantial size My heart is pounding My legs racing And still he is gaining I close my eyes Pumping harder My face wet With salty water Although I cannot see I hear his roaring gurgling power My mind is spinning I stop my sprinting And turn to him begging It is then that I awaken
I enjoy the imagery. I love the sea and all of it's nothings that scatter the shores. Ses glass especially. Then there is the second part I can relate to. I have a similar dream and maybe the monsters are different ,but either way this piece is captivating. TY for sharing...Jesse:wine:
socrates44San Fernando, Trinidad and TobagoNov 1, 2013
Hi EyeToLensToPage
The imagery in this piece is excellent, especially written by someone for whom English is a second language. It captures and holds the reader's attention throughout. One is relieved at the end on realizing it was only a dream. You have painted a very vivid picture of an "angry" sea. The same sea, in calm stillness, can also be very beautiful to watch, especially when it reflects a sunset. Here is such a view to calm you after your harrowing dream experience (nightmare):
"She is a thing of beauty in her calm stillness under the setting sun which lights up the evening sky in its glorious splendour and paints a glistening beam of light on the water's surface in line with the sun and surrounds it with brilliant colours of the rainbow"
This is from my "Heart of the Sea"
Have a wonderful day!
RedexNorthumberland, England UKNov 2, 2013
I enjoyed reading your sleeping nightmare it would seem, sad It was so very well written I know you have walked the shores, and felt suffering (salt tears)
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKNov 2, 2013
Liked this very much, had me holding my breath.
beautifulyouNew York, USANov 3, 2013
Hi EyeToLensToPage, this is excellent, and I love the unassuming 'I am here"; so simple yet powerful. you captured this dream in such a vivid way!
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The imagery in this piece is excellent, especially written by someone for whom English is a second language. It captures and holds the reader's attention throughout. One is relieved at the end on realizing it was only a dream.
You have painted a very vivid picture of an "angry" sea.
The same sea, in calm stillness, can also be very beautiful to watch, especially when it reflects a sunset. Here is such a view to calm you after your harrowing dream experience (nightmare):
"She is a thing of beauty in her calm stillness under the setting sun
which lights up the evening sky in its glorious splendour
and paints a glistening beam of light on the water's surface
in line with the sun and surrounds it
with brilliant colours of the rainbow"
This is from my "Heart of the Sea"
Have a wonderful day!
It was so very well written I know you have walked the shores, and felt suffering (salt tears)
this is excellent,
and I love the unassuming 'I am here"; so simple yet powerful.
you captured this dream in such a vivid way!
The seashells look bland
Bodies disappear in a blink
My mind can no longer think
Fear rips through my insides
Wow....
Its tough to add adjectives....