Solar Storm 4 Paloma

by candykidAshburn, Virginia, USA

Sep 2014 1,454 Views 37 comments

Solar Storm * 4 Paloma *

On a pillar of clouds, supporting my weight...
I stand and I stare at the nacreous gates...
With reverent patience, I wait to partake...
In an aeolian state of the wind and its wake...

As the crier of time, oh the visions I've seen...
Half asleep, in my dreams, ataraxia seems...
Seems to be, dreamed by me, scenes of starlings...
Queens and Kings crumble.... psithurism cleans...

A solar storm of misery in a cosmogyral place...
A space reminiscence of your beautiful face...
Your strands do command a fine gossamer foundation...
It is within your piercing stare that I have found my destination....

~ ~ ~ ~ ~

Posted: Sep 2014

About this poem:

Dedicated to you dearest Paloma....

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Comments (37)

Mizzy4Navan, Meath IrelandSep 5, 2014

Wow ! Christian.....
A starstruck dedication,
to a lady of Heavenly peace.

Lovely poetic gesture !!!!!

elo69santa cruz, California USASep 5, 2014

nice work.....

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKSep 5, 2014

This is awesome Christian, poetry doesn't get any better than this.

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKSep 5, 2014

I agree with Chrissie - AWESOME! Truly a fine write buddy...

Best wishes

Bill

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandSep 5, 2014

i tip my hat christian smiling beautifully drawn piece of writing

paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandSep 5, 2014

Dear CK I am lost for words what can I add to all that they have said it is you are an amazing poet,so you see what beauty can flow from the soul.A million thanks for the lovely poem.

paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandSep 5, 2014

Error...omit it is...you are .....

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKSep 6, 2014

It is within your piercing stare that I have found my destination....

I just read this poem again, it realy is very good Christian..

Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoSep 6, 2014

I think you have outdone yourself on this one Christain. Truly a fine write. Congrats....well done!

beautifulyouNew York, USASep 6, 2014

Very nice ck,
especially the last line.. very cool

diana_1San fernando, San Fernando Trinidad and TobagoSep 7, 2014

beautiful....truly awesome candykid....

Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaSep 9, 2014

Hi Ck,

Nicely written. A difficult challenge and you have done a superb job.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USASep 11, 2014

I truly thank each and every one of you for your specific comments. God Bless you all......

orientalkoruGlenella, Queensland AustraliaSep 12, 2014

Wow CK how you can weave those words my dear friend... Pretty awesome! And just noticed you wrote the first entry here it seems... It has a ring that is almost spiritual to me as I read... Much enjoyed!

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USAOct 12, 2014

Mick, I truly appreciate your fine comment on my poem. I miss you very much and hope all is well with you.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USAOct 13, 2014

Elo......thank you very much. I look forward to more of your poetry as I admire it very much.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USANov 17, 2014

Christina and Bill.....I truly thank both of you for your kind and specific appraisals. ...I do miss both of you and your fine poetry and friendship...God bless you two.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USANov 17, 2014

Thank you Liam for that heartfelt comment.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USADec 11, 2014

You are so welcome Paloma....miss you and hope you are doing well.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USADec 11, 2014

Christina, I truly miss you too.....thanks for your time and lovely comments.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USADec 11, 2014

M.M.......beautifulyou.......thanks for your time and specific feedback.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USADec 11, 2014

Diana and Mac.....thanks.

Spartacus2012Biloxi, Mississippi USADec 11, 2014

Almost missed this gem of a tribute write Christian..

Ken

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USAJan 26, 2015

Kathy.......Kumasta ka?.......miss you here, and thank you for your outstanding appraisal. ....

aviasSoutheast, Missouri USAJan 26, 2015

Christian... Liked the line "as the crier of time, oh the visions I've seen".... brings to mind a tale from mythology or antiquity...one who has lived a life of immortality...beautiful vision.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USAMar 3, 2015

Thank you Harriett....this was presented as a response to a poem challenge that mandated the use of several difficult keywords...some of which I had never heard of. Thank you for that outstanding appraisal and specific feedback. ...God bless..

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USAJul 30, 2015

Ken... thanks....keep in touch. This was a fun challenge from Paloma.....

RedexNorthumberland, England UKJul 30, 2015

Hi Candy I never saw the challenge but you are a winner with this one.
I hope all goes good for you

paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandJul 30, 2015

Could not help going back to read this superb poem,thank you again for rising to this challenge with such an amazing write.I just love this poem.

rusticbinkmooseYaw, Saskatchewan CanadaAug 1, 2015

You have a way with words. Maybe I'm too superficial, but it a bit too deep for my
Rational brain.

candykidOPAshburn, Virginia USANov 15, 2015

Thanks Red. ....you still owe me a sloe-gin fizz. ....lol.

online today!

lindsyjonesunknown, California USANov 15, 2015

Christian a most amazing rendition to a very wonderful friend of ours, the most beautiful and lovely Paloma. I am speechless for this write Christian.