You close your eyes And I close mine We're kissing our love goodbye .. I'll never taste your lips You'll never smell my neck There you go, leaving me For many years to cry...
Chorus: Surrender to the power of weakness I think of you every time I'm breathless You left me alone speechless Show me how to make it through Can I teach myself, to let you go? How can I fight the well to remember? When all what's left of me is you
Forget me not Is all I have to say.. Now won't you set me free? Let me walk down my way But you keep locking me inside I wanna go out and play like child To learn how to ride my bike To forget I ever had you by my side
Chorus: Surrender to the power of weakness I think of you every time I'm breathless You left me alone speechless Show me how to make it through Can I teach myself, to let you go? How can I fight the well to remember? When all what's left of me is you
Hey Rob , I really love when ppl advice me yeah Im not perfect in English and i will try my best to improve it cuz I LOVE English and i only write my poems in English :)
Thats fine, really good stuff!. if I may i would have said the following in these two lines
Surrender TO the power of weakness Now wont you SET me free Hope you dont mind me helping with the grammar, we are all here to help one another. Keep writing. Rob
Swan87OPSyria, QatarApr 27, 2010
How sweet of you to care and thank you so much for giving me some of your time rob . i will correct it right away
Swan
caroljoyceManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKApr 27, 2010
Don't worry, poetry does't have to be perfect or it would loose its soul.Yours is great just as it is.
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yeah Im not perfect in English and i will try my best to improve it cuz I LOVE English and i only write my poems in English :)
Thanks Rob Im glad you like my poems :)
Swan
Surrender TO the power of weakness
Now wont you SET me free
Hope you dont mind me helping with the grammar, we are all here to help one another.
Keep writing.
Rob
How sweet of you to care and thank you so much for giving me some of your time rob .
i will correct it right away
Swan
@ hedistuff : Many thanks to you Mr.Hedi
Swan
Carol xxx
Swan