first time

by BentleeSmith Falls, Ontario, Canada

Aug 2009 822 Views 20 comments

"first time"

i saw you. . . . I paused as my feet stilled, I had to catch up to my thoughts, I'd look away n back again, seemed we were motionless, pasted to timeless thought, I saw an innocence in your smile, candle of life in your eyes, honey laden skin on your face, a host of light embraced your presence, she's beautiful inside an out, you hadn't noticed how you captured my thoughts an stilled my feet the first time I saw you ~ Bentlee

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Posted: Aug 2009

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amahlalaAberdeen, South Dakota USAAug 28, 2009

Another great poem!

Polarbutterflyunknown, Northwest Territories CanadaAug 28, 2009

Beautiful.Thanks for sharing.

QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Wow, it's beautiful Bentlee... Just love findng surprises from you under the poetry tree... *big smile* Thanks......

gypsyheartSouth coast of KwaZulu Natal, KwaZulu-Natal South AfricaAug 28, 2009

Very nice poem bentlee.

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Ty Ama:) glad you enjoyed

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Hi P B ty for your comment:)

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

hugs Q S i'm glad you liked it, thats what I thought the first time I saw you:)

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Hello Gypsy, ty :)

poetengineerriyadh, Ar Riyad Saudi ArabiaAug 28, 2009

really beautiful poem , i feel her really capture ur thoughts and soon i think she will put u in the love jail , thanks for ur share

andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKAug 28, 2009

thankyou bentlee, it says so much more than the few lines there, the kind of thing i like, andrew.

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Lol Khaled, I like that, the love jail, ty for the smile an good chuckle:)

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 28, 2009

Well Andrew in reply to yours, I think holmes is pretty sharp:)

QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

The love jail... hmm.. lol hope we never end up there.. but I love your words....

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

Q S doesn't sound like that bad a place lol:)

QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

hmm.. I guess I've not heard it put that way before..

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

Nor have I, lol a life sentence lol :) cheers

poetengineerriyadh, Ar Riyad Saudi ArabiaAug 29, 2009

you got it bentlee , when u r prisoner in love jail u enjoy stay at it and do not like to leave it cos it is beauty jail , not as other jails which all prisoners like to escape from it , u go to love jail with ur choice and u enjoy love feelings inside it for ever , it is the happiness of life if any one live inside the love jail or love cave , hope u best wishes for both of u and her , thanks bentlee

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

Kind of you as always Khaled, ty for your thoughts an wishes:-)

QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaAug 29, 2009

Thnk-you Khaled.. very sweet of you...

BentleeOPSmith Falls, Ontario CanadaSep 1, 2009

Often in my writing it's a bookmark of immediate happening, i can reflect to in my latter years if i choose to do so, as life carries on......

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