LAURA 5 7 5 darkhorse challenge

by SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales, UK

Aug 2014 723 Views 17 comments

LAURA - 5-7-5 (darkhorse challenge)

Author: SCatlyn

Laura heart of gold
Been through nightmares still untold
Love you, treasure soul.

~ ~ ~ ~ ~

Posted: Aug 2014

About this poem:

Laura, I'm not certain what 5-7-5 means(I think it's a haiku) - so I may not have gotten it right...
but this is for you

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Comments (17)

Spartacus2012Biloxi, Mississippi USAAug 29, 2014

Nice haiku SCatlyn!

Ken

weemick1960Fife, Scotland UKAug 29, 2014

Hi Catlyn, 5-7-5- Is a Haiku as Ken said. I think that's the traditional form. Five syllables, 7 syllables and five syllables. You got It right and a good job on It too. Have a good day. Catch you later. Your Friend always....MIKE.

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 30, 2014

So that's what it is, Ken -

And all these years, I've known the term - well, I knew a haiku consisted of 3 lines... but that's about it!
Thank you so much for the comment, and the enlightenment!

SCatlyn

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandAug 30, 2014

really touching beautiful piece excellent pen

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 30, 2014

Awww.... thank you so much, darkhorse. I really appreciate your comment; and your challenge sparked an idea in my mind for a dear friend.

SCatlyn

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 30, 2014

p.s.That should've read 'haiku-er darkhorse'

Girlygirl196349Fullerton, California USAAug 30, 2014

Lyn I'm speechless!! This is so kind hearted and thoughtful!! The poem is just beautiful!! Thank you from the bottom of my heart!! :I'm so blessed to have you as my friend

LYN YOU ROCK!!!

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 30, 2014

LauraGirl!!!

You made my night!!(day in your timezone, but I had quite a beautiful surprise from Cafe that made my day in my daytime zone

)

I'm just thrilled you stopped by and I got to surprise you this time!!

Aww... hope all's well - and if not, hope it will be soon.

Love ya lots, Girlygirl!!

And it is I who am blessed to have you as a friend

Lyn

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKSep 15, 2014

*To Andrew- oops, it was you who mentioned on my very 1st try here, one of the great things about poetry was making up your own words... I think I've got one like that somewhere on a piece of paper - did it while in a car-kind of alphabet rap... I think...(only on red lights, though

)

tauntedhumorcolumbus, Ohio USASep 17, 2014

Cool and very sweet

ImagineLoveVenus, Montana USASep 18, 2014

Here's a teddy for Cat, who made this wonderful sweet poem and
one for Laura

because we know you love them!

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKSep 22, 2014

Aww... thank you for taking the time to read my poems, Taunted. It is so appreciated - glad you enjoyed!

Cat

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKSep 22, 2014

Aww... Jadeite! Thank you so much for your sweet comment and for the

! So appreciated, and I didn't realize Laura loved them(I prob. should have...I'm very SCatterbrained

, but now I'll remember

)
Thank you, Prof. Jade, for all your kindness and wisdom (and sharing in my crazy 'catworld') - and this makes 2 for you:

Cat

niah9Auckland, New ZealandSep 22, 2014

Glad I am not the only one getting the 5-7-5 wrong...or shrouded in confusion....great write though, loved it, and about a special young lady....K

SCatlynOPBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKSep 23, 2014

Thank you, Niah! Well, it appears I got it right- or at least the 5-7-5 part, but confusing, yes

.

I think Socrates described it quite well in explaining the various haikus on another poem...
but as stated, my true purpose was the beautiful subject <3<3<3...

Thanks, NiahK!

beautifulyouNew York, USASep 23, 2014

a lovely gift for gg,

thanks for your sharing it with us SCatlyn