I've towed the line with you heavy on my back, your days filled with empty an future in black. It's my choice to keep you alive in my wake, my future is bright while yours rests in my cloud. If I happen to stop quick in my tracks, I'm pushed off my stop by your shadow so close. They say mimick is a complimentary form, at times it's a burden in one's freedom of life. Back up a bit to open my space that's mine in my life, cause there's times that shared space is welcome to two for the right reasons in the day. I live my own life with each step that I take as I walk through my day~
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Posted: Nov 2010
About this poem:
an expression of some conversations I've had with people over the years that are choked in their life by someone close. That chooses not to give people their space. Probably due to no self passion in their life.
Hi Kickit, I guess what I've got from that situation is a person that's not able to find their purpose in life, on a daily basis. Perhaps they get a false sense of security by shadowing another person's life. Ty for your ideas here.
It's good if you know that your future is bright, And your only job's to get rid of the one, With whom you have shared sweet moments of life. But what if your future proves not very bright, And she so ungraciously spared takes your advice, To, please, step aside to make for you space, So that her shadow shall not block your way. What if she's gone and then nothing is left? Don't jump to conclusions, don't make any haste.
jeddah12singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeNov 20, 2010
Marikia you offer alot of valid thoughts in your comment. I guess if we all knew our true destiny we would never have to make decisions as it's already been plotted for us eh lol. Cheers an ty.
Bentlee, no generalizations, I just wanted to say that you sound so uncompromising in your poem ... Take one step at a time, do it without hurting her feelings and saying that you bore her heavily on your back and her future is in black, because There were better times perhaps, Her future didn't seem so black, And birds were flying,grass was green.You shared one space and that was it.
Marikia..You didn't read what the poem was about did you. As there is no she in this writing thats involved in my life. Ty for your ideas and concerns here, however there's no basis for me to apply them
kle76amnew york, New York USANov 20, 2010
I read the poem and thought this is about depression, cancer or something like that but after viewing Bentlee's comment I immediately thought "hey I know some of those person with parasitic mentalities" Great write Bentlee.......
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