live your own life!

I've towed the line with you heavy on my back, your days filled with empty an future in black. It's my choice to keep you alive in my wake, my future is bright while yours rests in my cloud. If I happen to stop quick in my tracks, I'm pushed off my stop by your shadow so close. They say mimick is a complimentary form, at times it's a burden in one's freedom of life. Back up a bit to open my space that's mine in my life, cause there's times that shared space is welcome to two for the right reasons in the day. I live my own life with each step that I take as I walk through my day~
~ ~ ~ ~ ~
Posted: Nov 2010
About this poem:
an expression of some conversations I've had with people over the years that are choked in their life by someone close. That chooses not to give people their space. Probably due to no self passion in their life.

Poems entered on these pages are copyrighted by the authors who entered them. They cannot be reproduced without the author's written consent. © Copyright 2001-2024. All rights reserved.

Post Comment

Comments (21)

Redex
Selfishness by another name, good one Bentleecheers
Bentlee
Hi Kickit, I guess what I've got from that situation is a person that's not able to find their purpose in life, on a daily basis. Perhaps they get a false sense of security by shadowing another person's life. Ty for your ideas here. cheers
Bentlee
Hi Red..... yeah eh sometimes it is for sure, ty for commenting.cheers hug
caroljoyce
Interesting thoughts, Bentlee.
CJ
Gashly
reminds me of entourage. heh. this...is a great piece about disease. obsession, is never healthy. cool observation, bentlee.
Bentlee
Hi Cj, good to see you round these parts lol. Ty for reading and commenting cheers hug
Bentlee
Hi Gashly....I've never watched entourage so I can't relate. Good comment you've offered ty cheers hug
freeatlast64847
Been in a relationship like this. Glad it's over! Kudos! beer
marikia
It's good if you know that your future is bright, And your only job's to get rid of the one, With whom you have shared sweet moments of life. But what if your future proves not very bright, And she so ungraciously spared takes your advice, To, please, step aside to make for you space, So that her shadow shall not block your way. What if she's gone and then nothing is left? Don't jump to conclusions, don't make any haste.
jeddah12
very interesting poem bentlee,,very nice write cheers
Bentlee
Marikia you offer alot of valid thoughts in your comment. I guess if we all knew our true destiny we would never have to make decisions as it's already been plotted for us eh lol. Cheers an ty. wine
Bentlee
Hi Free, is that reflective to your screen name you've chose on here rolling on the floor laughing cheers and ty for commenting.cheers
Bentlee
Ty Jeddah for reading and offering your thoughts wine
marikia
Bentlee, no generalizations, I just wanted to say that you sound so uncompromising in your poem ... Take one step at a time, do it without hurting her feelings and saying that you bore her heavily on your back and her future is in black, because There were better times perhaps, Her future didn't seem so black, And birds were flying,grass was green.You shared one space and that was it.
Bentlee
Marikia..You didn't read what the poem was about did you. As there is no she in this writing thats involved in my life. Ty for your ideas and concerns here, however there's no basis for me to apply them hug
kle76am
I read the poem and thought this is about depression, cancer or something like that but after viewing Bentlee's comment I immediately thought "hey I know some of those person with parasitic mentalities" Great write Bentlee.......applause
marikia
OK, now I see it. Thanks for opening my eyes. Now that I think about it - nice poem, really. Thanks and carry on. Marikia
Bentlee
Kle .... I think we all know some like that and it can be tough to spend time with them, as it can exhaust a person. cheers an ty for commenting.
hedistuff
I really like your use of metaphore. u r a terrific prolific writer who often comes at things with such original angles. thank you...
Bentlee
lol thanks Marikia, I know at times some writes can be confusing eh. We also see things in different interpretations too wine
Bentlee
Thank you Hedi.....thats quite a compliment to my writing in your comment. Very kind words indeed ty cheers I'm glad you enjoy my work.
Post Comment - Let others know what you think about this Poem
Report Abuse for this page, if inappropiate
We use cookies to ensure that you have the best experience possible on our website. Read Our Privacy Policy Here