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THE OUTER LIMITS

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Falling fast through a tunnel in space
Spinning and falling picking up the pace
Only darkness – no light along the way
Am I stuck in this black nothing to stay

Suddenly slowing down bit by bit
Peering out - multiple stars lit
Then again spinning and twirling away
Continuing on – no night or day

Finally reaching the outer limits of time
Floating there wondering in my mind
How to return where I came from
Earth - the third planet from the Sun

What is beyond the outer edge of space
Wondering why I was sent to this place
Uncomfortable with being here not knowing
What is beyond and where am I going
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Posted: Feb 2020
About this poem:
Due to someone's criticism on here of my first write - I pulled off and revamped but I doubt it will please.

Traveling in time and space. Movie "Contact" with Jodie Foster - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zR_2mBuNU2I and Part II https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HzTHC6JSUvM

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godsprincessonline today!
Due to someone's criticism of my first write - I pulled off and revamped but I doubt it will please.

Kathy
trurorobonline today!
There was nothing wrong with the first one, and this says the message just as well, maybe sensitivity played a part here, but you cannot dislike a poem Kathy if you dont read it.
Rob
trurorobonline today!
Please dont criticise if you are not capable of writing anything decent yourself, you know who you are!!, all literary critics are failed authors or poets.
Rob
lovecanbereal
Don't worry about anyone rubbishing your writing, Kathy. Write to please yourself first...bouquet
Rachael_0622online today!
Kathy
Best wishes to you
Dont let anyone
Brow beat you
In invisible ink
Guilty on your forehead
For u r not
U know it
God knows it

All will be well
All must be well
All is well

Your dominion is yours
Not that of the complainer
They r out of line it appears
Peace be unto you
Rachael_0622
Rachael_0622online today!
Kathy

Don't let them
Rob u of your joy
You own your own joy
They can only steal your joy
If you let them
Make a choice
Change the channel
Adapt
Not them
Read my poem about
Einstein not putting barbs
On arrows
People shot at him
Disney was told he was a failure
Look at him now his legacy
Many were told negative
U r in control of your moments minutes hours days weeks months years
Your life choices
You Go Girl
Find u a new man
I may have finally
Read my poems growing experience
But it helped much!
A Social Worker supervisor once told me when it comes down to the brass tax men don't care about appearance
It's the love heart in your soul!
Neither the man
nor the woman r perfect
Just Humans w flaws
We all need love
Kathy that includes you!
Don't allow yourself to think u r not good enough! For you are!
Your heart can make the demonstration
Know what you seek
Make it a mission to get it
Ask seek knock pray
Don't be surprised when God answers your prayer He is Lustening
He wants you
Happy complete whole
He is the Captain
You are the first mate
Read my profile in that
Enjoy!
Hope this helps!

Rachael_0622
Amicablesmiles
We should always acknowledge constructive criticism. It allows for improvements.

Sometime I wish I can float to outer space like your poem describes. wave
mcradloff
I don't get too many trolls on here, so I like that a lot. Critics are sometimes helpful, but mostly hurtful, I guess my opinion is if I want your help, I'll ask for it.hug
godsprincessonline today!
Thank you Rob and LCBR.

Kathyteddybear
godsprincessonline today!
Amicable - I don't mind helpful suggestions given kindly. However, I was told my rhythm was off after the 2nd stanza and the poem then lost all it's meaning. Then on another poem I was told to change a word and then it would be correct. However, the changed word would have changed the whole meaning of my poem. But enough complaining. There are no comments yet about the poem above which I assume I failed at again. Thanks everyone for your kind support.

Kathy
lovecanbereal
Kathy, slight imperfections in rhythm, and meter, are to be expected. We are not "perfection machines". This is what makes our art; and indeed all good art - real. A few flaws, show that we are human. Anyway; we are the best at what we do here, (the corner at CS) otherwise others on this site would be doing it better...which clearly they are not...

Remember "no statue was ever erected to celebrate a critic!" (I forget who said this, but it is very true).... bouquet
godsprincessonline today!
Thanks Mc and LCBR - I only write for enjoyment and release when I get frustrated. So I'm not perfect. No one is. Yes Mc there are trolls that go through once in a while and there is one prowling here lately and appears one poet may be heading for a crash landing.

Kathy teddybear
salamunaonline today!
Totally agree with Robert. i enjoyed your first version and also enjoyed it now. thank you for sharing it one more time.It s your creation and your own feelings. and they are the good ones. re. Lillyteddybear
WILDANDREADYonline today!
kathy dont listen to them idiots.some people have to shout out their disgust on someone else while hiding their own dreary accomplishments making them losers some writers on this site were never told how bad they are.banana banana banana doh doh doh kiss kiss kiss
godsprincessonline today!
Thank you Lily - I have to control these knee reactions when I get negative feedback and just ignore. Will try from now on.

Kathy hug
godsprincessonline today!
Thank you Travis - Prince of Cats. If someone has a bad poem on here I don't remark on it at all. I try to be respective of others feelings. However, they do have a right to be on here. BUT wish they would be sure it is a poem and not a lot of gibberish and rambling just to get attention. I feel the Blog would be a better place for those craving lots of attention and lots of room to ramble.

Kathy hug
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