by gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts, USA
Jul 2011 1,127 Views 19 comments
Systemic
A talk on “Sonnets”, once did attend
fascinated by the sound was I
of words that move to tears or grin
skill lacking, my pen has yet to try
Not academic-taught are my poems
no poetic training have I had
but my pen writes its messages
whether mediocre, good or bad
My writing is free-verse systemic
from feelings, deep, deep within
that rise up into words polemic
words, worlds ready to begin again
Once lost somewhere in my heart
this rhyming verse I now impart.
fascinated by the sound was I
of words that move to tears or grin
skill lacking, my pen has yet to try
Not academic-taught are my poems
no poetic training have I had
but my pen writes its messages
whether mediocre, good or bad
My writing is free-verse systemic
from feelings, deep, deep within
that rise up into words polemic
words, worlds ready to begin again
Once lost somewhere in my heart
this rhyming verse I now impart.
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Posted: Jul 2011
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Comments (19)
It is difficult to believe you have no poetic training, you a naturally sophisticated style - in particular you have broken the code apropos actually getting free verse to sound like poetry. Free verse with no discernable rhythm or lyricism is simply prose.
As regarding this sonnet, Young Miss Jazzy has beaten me to the punch, and I simply endorse her comments whole-heartedly.
A great maiden sonnet...
Kindest regards
Bill
this phrase alone made the read worthwhile, thanks for sharing dear Massachusetts...
Your comments, as are you, are very kind and most appreciated!
your birthing of a first sonnet
is well beyond mere mediocre
a touch of self insight upon it
examination the better to broker
your systemic branching of verse
to new forms new rules and ways
a new coin seen from obverse
worthy of admiration and praise
we, your fellow poets take note
of hearts both feint and fair
your heart, through verse does devote
to others with extraordinary care
so keen your view, intuition astute
sonnets flow from your passionate fruit
well done! ;-)
Give him a beer,
well written gnj4u.....thankyou....Andrew...xxx
rob
You are first class Poet.I am taking my hat off .Bravo.
On behalf of my pen, I thank you for reading and making your very kind and much appreciated comment about its messages.