Plaintive and inexorable the last day drags us towards to its flat end. Time, imperious and merciless points with bony fingers towards the deadline And the atmosphere breathes down heavily with dread of separation. The energy In the house sighs and slides with suppressed sadness And my brain presses against the physical constraints of reality. Fear drips slowly from my consciousness saddening the dank, limp November leaves Whilst Solitude compresses my skull and the strange silence rings in my ears. Missing you sorrow steadily whispers in timed staccato memories As I roam disconsolate and disconnected through rooms that caressed time together. Now empty of love, the walls are watched by familiar items standing guard And I am followed listlessly by the tender wistful ghosts of our kisses. Little splinters of loss break loose from my mind and stab the tender confines of my heart, I curl tightly under the cold creased covers, yet there is no shelter without your warmth. I seek the absence of sleep and my dreams curve around the gentle sweetness of your soul. I cannot swallow for the missing you
well...this is, despondent. many of the comps sound quite original. how are you?
freeatlast64847Lanagan, Missouri USANov 15, 2010
Beautifully poignant! My heart goes out to you.
jeddah12singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeNov 15, 2010
a very hearted write and sad,im with you cj,,very well pennede,,thanks for sharing and cheer up my dear,another trials in life
SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKNov 15, 2010
This is beautiful, insightful... & heart-wrenching. "...splinters of loss break loose from my mind and stab the tender confines of my heart". So real; a heartfelt, deep description of walking through days of loss. Wonderful writing..
to roam in a home where the ghosts of the lost love that once filled the air is so heart wrenching. the empty ness sometimes gets too be to much.' beautiful write to a sad reality.
RedexNorthumberland, England UKNov 16, 2010
First off missed you around carol. The tile is so apt, pulled from deep within this is a wonderful write, of loss, stirs one
caroljoyceOPManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKNov 16, 2010
Thank you everyone for such generous comments and concern. I really did not intend to depress anyone. Nothing terribly bad has happened, just truly missing a dear person I finally got to spend time with recently and maximising my 'poetic licence'.I am sure I shall survive it! CJ
i kept 'missing' this poem and beautiful it is! so glad i finally got to read it properly..
PinkpoetressClarksburg, West Virginia USANov 19, 2010
Carol, Wonderful poem, though sad. I hope you are alright. Take care.
kle76amnew york, New York USANov 19, 2010
The Missed is a blessed person I can feel it through your words Caroljoyce but take heart we learn to live with the missing though we never truly get pass it
jvaskiunknown, California USANov 19, 2010
"It is better to have loved and lost - than never loved at all"
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So real; a heartfelt, deep description of walking through days of loss.
Wonderful writing..
beautiful write to a sad reality.
CJ
Wonderful poem, though sad. I hope you are alright. Take care.