Loosen

by caroljoyceManchester, Greater Manchester, England, UK

Jul 2010 809 Views 19 comments

Loosen

All resistance lifting
Senses stirring, shifting
Reason is quiet
Chemically induced riot
Foothold daily slipping
Caution tender, gripping
Downwards, backwards sliding
No conscious overriding
Constraints now loose
Denial not in use
Resisting little, less
To absolute, confess
Deeper, wider going
Only instincts knowing
Softer, safer now
Don’t know how
Endlessly entice, invite
Touch, close, tight
Neurons firing, yearn
Beyond point no return.

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Posted: Jul 2010

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trurorobAlicante, Valencia SpainJul 20, 2010

loosened me up Carol, so it worked!!, nice!
rob

Ladybee42East Liverpool, Ohio USAJul 20, 2010

gosh CJ sounds like you are being slowly....
um.....'wooed'?...just saying ...

lovely poem

caroljoyceOPManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKJul 20, 2010

No way Lady! Thanks. They are all on heat you know, I am preparing a cauldron for it. This is an ambiguous poem, there may have been something at the back of my mind when I wrote it, but there was absolutely nothing at the front at all.

kyriacos2009Hemel Hempstead, Hertfordshire, England UKJul 20, 2010

Tell them the truth CJ, if you don't I will...lol

I liked this write....

agoodguy2havesuffolk, Virginia USAJul 20, 2010

C.J.F. you ol' witch you...cookin' in the cauldron again! Outstanding staccato, cadence and innuendo! ;-)

gardenhackleStratford, Connecticut USAJul 20, 2010

Wow, do I ever smell something brewin'. Mmmmmmm!

GashlyAmish Hell, Ohio USAJul 20, 2010

i like the way it flows, it does flow downward, if that makes any sense? Anyway, I dig it!

Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida USAJul 20, 2010

Very powerful poem.

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAJul 21, 2010

Hi, caroljoyce,
I love Only instincts knowing...what a perfect place to be...Softer, safer now. Thank you for sharing.

freeatlast64847Lanagan, Missouri USAJul 21, 2010

Very cool stream-of-conciousness piece carol! The ambiguity allows the reader to read into it whatever he wants. It swirls!

BoyseeksGirlCooloola, Queensland AustraliaJul 21, 2010

Thank you,caroljoyce,

Simple,complicated, fearful, happy and maybe bewitching if I may add.

Ken x

hedistuffLayopolis, West Virginia USAJul 21, 2010

let me take a stab at it...might I?...a comfort station flush?

RedexNorthumberland, England UKJul 21, 2010

A smoking joint here I reckon, lovely stirs the senses in what ever way we read

sophiasummerNorthland, New ZealandJul 21, 2010

Constraints now loose
Denial not in use

an unconcience thought of letting go..
your words for me are roads we sow.

Now that's uber cool

SS
I love your intriguing way you have "crafted" your potion of words.
"As always"

MonaLisaSmile4UEl Paso, Texas USAJul 21, 2010

That One really made me feel relaxed when I read it . . . I read that piece, while sipping a nice chilled glass of merlot earlier. . . Very nice one, Carol . . . Such a Gifted and Wonderful Talent you are Thank you