exploded mind unplugged and frail into the empty jumped off the rail
denial in depth abyssed darkened thought hemisphered labotomy straight jackets n fold
mis-understood minds stories not told
sanitorium filled with like minded folk under knife forced down pills in most views social poke
intellect profound padded walls not a sound forced recluse arms in fold padded floor paced around
echoed walls of plight cry captive ghosts till they die
unsung eye is not shy deadened sight lived their lie as the gavel met the block permeated air lifetime lock
routined minutes....hours n days clustered thought in stale haze one sides right......one sides left down the middle disconnect emotions that hang yet...on the edge...of that blade
clunkin clang of the lock every night nine o'clock five am early rise no horizon of new size
boiled egg, toast and pills, blackened coffee, tea or juice lift your tongue...wheres the pill did you swallow it whole again
twelve foot guard skirts the yard barbwire link bound atop one way in...is your out.. visitors log dried up ink
was the gavel that took what the mind had to think!
ty Andrew, oh yes in the past indeed even as I wrote this it was a little unsettling as it flowed. Ty for your thoughts my friend.
sshoreHyderabad, Telangana IndiaOct 11, 2009
felt the atmosphere if one could call it that..phenomenal flow of words and not just words its real! you have captured in words such intensity and reality unbelievable!!....TY!
ty sshore, in this writing I felt I had to strive for an intense reality to make it become real in a way that they never knew to know it! ty for your thoughts
sshoreHyderabad, Telangana IndiaOct 12, 2009
sshoreHyderabad, Telangana IndiaOct 12, 2009
amahlalaAberdeen, South Dakota USAOct 12, 2009
Disturbing, thought-provoking and yet it captures the feel of the era.
ty Ama yes it is sadly disturbing, however one of the ways many people suffered in mans ignorance of right vs wrong and premature diagnosis of an ill mind and or equivelent nervous break down treated as crazy in the head or mentally disturbed too. Ty for your comment Ama.
ty Jazzy, after I read your comment I read it slow three times in a row an I honestly didn't realize the impact of how it reads. Ty for how you commented an made me look at it differently from outside the box I suppose.
poetengineerriyadh, Ar Riyad Saudi ArabiaOct 13, 2009
thanks for ur beauty mind as always i like and enjoy reading ur words , god bless u my dear friend
Thank you so much Khaled for your compliment on my writing. It's nice to see people enjoy what I write, encouragement for more lol. God bless you too my friend.
Yes Rob indeed inhumanity after the fact of the initial decision of incarceration, based upon mans ignorance of the human mind an all it's eccentric ways:) ty for sharing your thoughts:)
I watched the movie Gothika 2 nights ago, it reminded me of this write and how this type of incarceration could make one go crazy in self thought, and placed thought by others.
ty Scatlyn....this is one of my favourites, i wrote on here for a long time with my cell phone. Which only allowed me to effect in paragraph. Now I'm on a laptop lol, Santa came early
I could easily see this being made into a song. It's got great flow & is eloquently written. I liked the flow so much I had to read it twice. Great poem Bentlee. =)
Hi Jak, glad you liked it, I have a friend that thought he may be able to put music to it, perhaps one day I'll do just that lol, thanks for the reply, cheers.
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you have captured in words such intensity and reality unbelievable!!....TY!
Thanks for vivid picture. :confused
rob