rage of silence

by kickit22auburn, Washington, USA

Nov 2011 666 Views 10 comments

rage of silence

stone cold eyes
not even a muscle flinching on the outside
deep passion
filled with rage on the inside
deep breath
cannot be seen from watching the movement of the chest
a throat filled
with pride being washed down to the bottomless pit
blue lines
expanding under the skin that is so thin
curled up bones
ready to release the rage
voice of reason
enters the canal but cannot be heard
blue sky
turns a deep red
throbbing pulse
across the head
silence
is not that far off from being dead

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Posted: Nov 2011

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Comments (10)

cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USANov 18, 2011

Not sure of all your meaning but seems to be but a thin line between life and death.. Fine write bro.

steve1223adelaide, South Australia AustraliaNov 18, 2011

Interesting write

kickit22OPauburn, Washington USANov 18, 2011

hi cafe

these are the inner workings of a human body when one is to say nice not in a good mood has nothing to do with death all tho death is mentioned but it is the silence meaning the person is gonna act out from his/her built up rage from the inside. blue lines that of course is the blood vains, curled up bones that is the hand, fingers made into a fist, voice of reason entering the canal of course that is a friend trying to talk peace with the person but the person is not responding to the advice. blue sky turning deep red of course that is the eyes seeing red I hope now this will make sense too you. thanks for reading.

kickit

kickit22OPauburn, Washington USANov 18, 2011

thanks for stopping in steve always appreciated.

kickit.

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKNov 18, 2011

Hi Kickit

A fine exposition of pent up rage... Good write.

Regards

Bill

Maxeen_1YORK, North Yorkshire, England UKNov 22, 2011

rage of silence
KICKIT thankyou sweet for sharing such a deep Poignant write..
stone cold eyes
not even a muscle flinching on the outside
deep passion
filled with rage on the inside
deep breath

andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKNov 23, 2011

This is a good write Kickit...how have you been?.....right from the start I recognised this as pure rage, you have captured it well, not a place I have visited often I am very pleased to say, but still an excellent write....Andrew

AyhraAdelaide, South Australia AustraliaNov 23, 2011

Very nice and deep poem kickit. Thank you for sharing this

jazzy75Houston, Texas USANov 23, 2011

vivid and chilling!!

jeddah12singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeDec 6, 2011

agree with sir andrew,,i rather stay away,lol;;;;nah,,very well written to describe an emotion thats inside...
kickit out sir,,dont let it turn into fire